MeeAugraphie

12 Comments

1. Becca
   Posted August 21, 2007 at 5:33 am | Permalink

   This brings to mind all those early morning travels…well done!

   Becca, I think we are overdue for a mini vacation, that is where my head went, thank you.

2. Clare
   Posted August 21, 2007 at 6:59 am | Permalink

   I really enjoyed all the images and sounds you created, and I re-read them — I love the line “orange glows shyly through shadows” — this is exquisite!!
   

   Thank you, Clare, that line I actually edited, shyly was my second thought.

3. Bone
   Posted August 21, 2007 at 4:33 pm | Permalink

   This was enjoyable, as usual, Marcia. My favorite lines:

   <i>train breaks dawn’s silence
   orange glows shyly through shadows

   streetlights wink goodbye</i>

   OK, that’s like half the lines, I know

   
   Half is great with me! Thanks, Bone.

4. Ron
   Posted August 21, 2007 at 6:53 pm | Permalink

   I finally noticed how all three worked together to tell a story. Nicely done. Thanks.

   
   Ron, thank you, it was not intentional, but it does work, now that you mention it…

5. Tumblewords
   Posted August 21, 2007 at 10:00 pm | Permalink

   A lovely journey ~ ‘black ice builds layers’ leaves a mark in my mind - strong and provocative

   Susan, I guess my mind has already left summer and gone to winter. Glad my phrase left a mark, thanks.

6. Crafty Green Poet
   Posted August 22, 2007 at 1:42 am | Permalink

   setting off early morning, yes it reminds me of several journeys I’ve made

   
   Those early morning journeys have been few and far between for me, but I remember the feeling of the darkness and then the dawn well.

7. Megan
   Posted August 22, 2007 at 7:45 pm | Permalink

   Love the way you painted a picture of luggage waiting at the foot of the stairs and an early morning departure…well done!

   Thanks, Megan, I almost got to live it this weekend, but remodeling got in the way, again.

8. Heather
   Posted August 23, 2007 at 7:48 am | Permalink

   Another with different takes on ‘daybreak.’ I like that. I tend to think so literally.

   Heather, it is not a bad thing that you think so literally, because a lot of life is literal and blogging, writing, and poetry are about life.

9. Rae Trigg
   Posted August 23, 2007 at 10:46 am | Permalink

   Lovely haiku, all evocative of early morning. I really like the last one, especially the line ’streetlights wink goodbye’.

   Thank you, Rae Trigg, I also love that line; can’t believe I even thought of it….

10. patois
    Posted August 23, 2007 at 5:17 pm | Permalink

    Visualizing the shy glow. Very telling. Another series of poems able to immediately return me to another time. Thank you.

    Patois, to be able to return you to another time is a great feeling for me. Thank you for sharing your comment.

11. greggo
    Posted August 26, 2007 at 6:26 am | Permalink

    lovely haiku! you have a wonderful way of painting a picture with words.

    Thanks, Greggo, I was trying to paint with words since I can’t seem to handle a brush.

12. Patricia/Roswila
    Posted August 27, 2007 at 10:06 am | Permalink

    These are so evocative. I could really experience them each in turn.

    Patricia, that you experienced them is great. Thank you.