Comments on: (Fiction Friday) Jack and Jill’s Disappearance

By: ~willow~

~willow~ — Sun, 07 Oct 2007 14:56:20 +0000

It *is* amusing how “Jack and Jill” seems to be the nursery rhyme of choice among FF participants… it was my first thought too, but I resisted and went with something else that turned very dark and violent very quick - at least yours the violence you mention in your disclaimer is only alluded to, which actually makes it all the more powerful.

Cheers,
~willow~(A little late doing the rest of the Fiction Friday rounds!)

By: gautami

gautami — Sat, 06 Oct 2007 09:05:56 +0000

It is really very interesting that more than half the postshave been inspired by Jack and Jill. We all have done it differently!

I like the loose ends in here…

By: Jodi Cleghorn

Jodi Cleghorn — Fri, 05 Oct 2007 22:07:03 +0000

I loved the turn about midway - to ensure that he, Jeremiah got his 15 minutes of fame. I’m amazed at the deep links so many people have to Jack and Jill.

My partner reminded me last week, that open endings are often the best because it allows the reader to decide for themselves what the ending is.

By: jo

jo — Fri, 05 Oct 2007 18:08:42 +0000

Another chilling one. This week’s prompt has sure brought out the dark side in some LOL!

By: ann

ann — Fri, 05 Oct 2007 17:55:26 +0000

didn't someone say everyone gets
their 15 minutes of fame... Andy
Warhol I think, but I may be wrong

well well well... I wonder what
did happen to them? Hmmmm.....

Ann, I wish I knew what happened to them. Jeremiah, yes, he did want his 15 minutes of fame.

By: greggo

greggo — Fri, 05 Oct 2007 12:40:40 +0000

interesting take on the old classic! yeah, there’s a bit of darkness, and we can see where it’s heading, but i think i do like the vague ending. well done.

Thank you, Greggo, I think it was influenced by the news lately. I’m glad I dumped the ending, even though we weren’t supposed to edit.

By: Rose Dewy Knickers

Rose Dewy Knickers — Fri, 05 Oct 2007 12:16:44 +0000

(((Marcia))))

I bet Jeremiah was the quiet one. I like the quick pace and hard hitting sound bites.

Rose

P.S. Gautami did Jack and Jill as well. I did rats.

I suppose i stereotyped him a bit, Rose. The quick pace was actually because I was tired, grin, but thank you, Rose. I’m going to try to read y’all’s tonight, the real estate agent will be here later… I am behind with life other than writing as usual.