Monday Mural! What visual prompt do you think brought these words to mind? Check it out at Michelle’s Poefusion and while you are there see where it sent the other writers!
Heart’s Muse?
Her
fingers caress
metal strands
strike a chordwhile
moonlight seeks
soul’s distress
tide comes inhis
feet tread on
faltered smiles
hearts obsesswhile
caught between
breezes flowminds confess
MeeAugraphie
02/26/08
Yes, I edited some, and had to work harder than normal with the pattern (once it started unbidden). I also tried different stanza splits before settling on this one…
you caught the mood of the painting. It was ethereal and melancholy.
I love the last four lines of this poem, you seal it well.
oh that was so “poetic”… you know what i mean,, just flowing and spectacular…..
it’s hard to pick and choose the right words sometimes but I think you’ve done a pretty good. I really like – his feet tread on faltered smiles
You’ve repainted the picture here with your words. I agree with lissa. I like the line his feet tread on faltered smiles. I also think the ending leaves us wondering what they might have confessed. Thanks for sharing. Have a nice night.
that was a beautiful sound of words and images that struck a cord w/me…