Kindness – One Single Impression

Posted by MeeAugraphie
Mar 11 2008

One Single Impression chose kindness as their prompt for us this week. The examples given this week were awesome.

I could not decide whether to use one hand or kindness, so I wrote it both ways in order thought.

One hand extended
heat of emotion lessens
warmth bursts forth in bloom

–or–

Kindness extended
heat of emotion lessens
warmth bursts forth in bloom

I think I prefer “one hand”… What do you think?

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12 Responses

  1. I agree, I like the first version better.

    Rose

    xo


    Thank you, Rose.

  2. i prefer the rhythm & feel of “hand” in this haiku. what a perfect universal expression of kindness


    Hand was my initial response, I think I chose kindness later because the prompt was kindness, and extended hand kept saying help in my mind.. One of those times you second guess yourself, I guess. Thank you.

  3. SandyCarlson says:

    I like the first one better, as well. Beautifully done.


    Thank you!

  4. Quietpaths says:

    Either way the image comes across very well. Hand is more concrete. Great idea.

    Thank you!

  5. TC says:

    I’m going to be the odd duck: I like kindness better.


    TC, guess I was a bit of an odd duck, too, since I wrote it…

  6. My two cents? “One hand…” To my understanding it’s best to let the scene speak for itself. (”Show not tell…”) Kindness is most definitely implied in the hand extension.


    Patricia, that thought crossed my mind at one point, too, then left. I think that is why so many are choosing hand over kindness.

  7. I too like the first version. Well, my state of mind explains that!


    You’re still in that state? I hope enough hands are extended so your state changes!

  8. paisley says:

    definitely one hand… the other sounds alright… but the one hand… that is perfect…

  9. Tumblewords says:

    I’m joining the ‘hand’ people! Although each is nice, the first one is stronger and more visual. Nice work!

  10. MyBellavia says:

    I like the first one.

  11. spacedlaw says:

    I like the hand version best too.


    I think I can now say it is the ‘people’s choice. Thank you for replying, Spacedlaw.

  12. storyteller says:

    simple gesture takes
    another by surprise and
    simplifies our lives

    Hugs and blessings,


    Thank you, and I love your words, Storyteller.

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