Kindness - One Single Impression

March 11, 2008 | Filed Under Haiku, Ons Single Impression, Poetry 

One Single Impression chose kindness as their prompt for us this week. The examples given this week were awesome.

I could not decide whether to use one hand or kindness, so I wrote it both ways in order thought.

One hand extended
heat of emotion lessens
warmth bursts forth in bloom

–or–

Kindness extended
heat of emotion lessens
warmth bursts forth in bloom

I think I prefer “one hand”… What do you think?

Comments

12 Responses to “Kindness - One Single Impression”

  1. Rose Dewy Knickers on March 11th, 2008 14:50

    I agree, I like the first version better.

    Rose

    xo


    Thank you, Rose.

  2. qualcosa di bello on March 11th, 2008 15:32

    i prefer the rhythm & feel of “hand” in this haiku. what a perfect universal expression of kindness


    Hand was my initial response, I think I chose kindness later because the prompt was kindness, and extended hand kept saying help in my mind.. One of those times you second guess yourself, I guess. Thank you.

  3. SandyCarlson on March 11th, 2008 16:38

    I like the first one better, as well. Beautifully done.


    Thank you!

  4. Quietpaths on March 11th, 2008 18:09

    Either way the image comes across very well. Hand is more concrete. Great idea.

    Thank you!

  5. TC on March 11th, 2008 20:38

    I’m going to be the odd duck: I like kindness better.


    TC, guess I was a bit of an odd duck, too, since I wrote it…

  6. Patricia/Roswila on March 11th, 2008 21:46

    My two cents? “One hand…” To my understanding it’s best to let the scene speak for itself. (”Show not tell…”) Kindness is most definitely implied in the hand extension.


    Patricia, that thought crossed my mind at one point, too, then left. I think that is why so many are choosing hand over kindness.

  7. gautami tripathy on March 11th, 2008 23:01

    I too like the first version. Well, my state of mind explains that!


    You’re still in that state? I hope enough hands are extended so your state changes!

  8. paisley on March 11th, 2008 23:50

    definitely one hand… the other sounds alright… but the one hand… that is perfect…

  9. Tumblewords on March 11th, 2008 23:57

    I’m joining the ‘hand’ people! Although each is nice, the first one is stronger and more visual. Nice work!

  10. MyBellavia on March 12th, 2008 08:37

    I like the first one.

  11. spacedlaw on March 15th, 2008 09:56

    I like the hand version best too.


    I think I can now say it is the ‘people’s choice. Thank you for replying, Spacedlaw.

  12. storyteller on March 16th, 2008 08:13

    simple gesture takes
    another by surprise and
    simplifies our lives

    Hugs and blessings,


    Thank you, and I love your words, Storyteller.

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